Posted on November 6th, 2007 at 2:29 pm by Ruthie and
“Bye, Diana!” Albert yelled across the room
It seems impossible for her to leave the office
The way he walks, talks, smells, and looks
Creeps her out
“Bye Albert?” she mumbled
Entering the garage she realizes no keys
“Ugh I have to go by Albert again…”
She turns around
**loud gasp**
“Albert! I didn’t…”
THUG!
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I really like it. Ohhh the suspense. Maybe instead of stopping in her footsteps, you could say something like stopping in her path.
emstourtelot |
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It is a good story but the ending is cunfusing.
I mean did someone turn off the lights? Because u said it got black
einsteinkadiric
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who is this guy??? like in relation to her???
einsteinbender |
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What i really like about your story is that its has suspense on it and you dont give it away!!
but whos the guy??
emsgonzalez
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IT IS NOT 55 WORDS LONG YOU GOT TO SHORTEN IT UP! LOL!!
einsteinhonschke