Comments on: Visual Response http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/ Fri, 05 Dec 2008 10:22:56 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=wordpress-mu-1.2.5 By: emsesquerra http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-6 emsesquerra Mon, 22 Oct 2007 20:58:25 +0000 http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-6 Praise: I like how you used descriptive words, it made the poem flow and allowed me to paint my own picture also Question: When it says "The trees are thankful for the end of the rush what do you mean, what kind of rush?" Polish: Make sure that the poem makes sense and re-read. Other than that your poem was GOOD ! Praise: I like how you used descriptive words, it made the poem flow and allowed me to paint my own picture also

Question: When it says “The trees are thankful for the end of the rush
what do you mean, what kind of rush?”

Polish: Make sure that the poem makes sense and re-read. Other than that your poem was GOOD !

]]> By: einsteinhonschke http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-5 einsteinhonschke Mon, 22 Oct 2007 20:49:09 +0000 http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-5 I like how you don't tell what the poem is about. There are lots of detail i like how you said it went from a powerful, loud song to a joyful, calm song. So don't change that. i didn't understand like what was the storm was an earthquake, or a hurricane, or just a regular storm. I am not saying you should blantently tell what kind of storm it is. Maybe just give little clues. But is a grest poem you are really good. I like how you don’t tell what the poem is about. There are lots of detail i like how you said it went from a powerful, loud song to a joyful, calm song. So don’t change that. i didn’t understand like what was the storm was an earthquake, or a hurricane, or just a regular storm. I am not saying you should blantently tell what kind of storm it is. Maybe just give little clues. But is a grest poem you are really good.

]]> By: emstourtelot http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-4 emstourtelot Mon, 22 Oct 2007 20:47:35 +0000 http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-4 I really liked the last verse of the poem. It it kind of like a storm. Why do the clouds cuddle together? Is it for protection or warmth or is it for comfort? Can you think of more similes? I really liked the last verse of the poem. It it kind of like a storm. Why do the clouds cuddle together? Is it for protection or warmth or is it for comfort? Can you think of more similes?

]]> By: emsesquerra http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-3 emsesquerra Mon, 22 Oct 2007 20:36:56 +0000 http://einsteinwabula.learnerblogs.org/2007/10/19/visual-response/#comment-3 The things i like about this poem is that you used really good descriptive words. It is good because had a good beginning which made me want to read more; you also had a good ending. There wasn't anything in your writing that made me wonder, what? One thing that you can do to improve your piece of writing is connecting the middle together making it connect easier, otherwise it was a good piece of writing. The things i like about this poem is that you used really good descriptive words. It is good because had a good beginning which made me want to read more; you also had a good ending. There wasn’t anything in your writing that made me wonder, what? One thing that you can do to improve your piece of writing is connecting the middle together making it connect easier, otherwise it was a good piece of writing.

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